Reviewer: GuiLun41
Author: GuiLunForever
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/LoveGuiLun_01
Site: timeless-memories.co.nr
Title: 5/5
I really liked the story title. Really matched well with the storyline.
Forewords: 8.5/10
The flashback was nice, but I think you gave away a major hint of what was going to happen to them over the years.
Plot: 15/20
I loved reading it! But I saw a couple flaws in the way it flowed together. For example, the way Gui Gui and Wang Zi met was rushed.
Originality: 7/10
I have read other one shots like this before: Guy and girl break up, guy moves, girl finds another guy, guy comes back to confess, girl lets go.
Style of Your Writing: 11.5/15
To me, it was the way you structured it. I lost my place a couple times and had to re-read it.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 14/15
A few minor punctuation mistakes, but its all good.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 7/10
The setting and actions of the characters could have been described a little bit more.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 10/10
I loved the background and poster. Really fit in with the story.
Creativity and Bonus: 3/5
Total of [81/100]
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