Title: Just Say It Already
Author: Juliada3
Reviewer: GuiLun41
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/juliada3/
Title: 3.5/5
The title is fine, the "It" should not be capitalized.
Forewords: 8/10
Adding more information into the characters descriptions would help the reader have a better understanding of the characters abilities.
Plot: 17/20
Being a GuiLun fan as well, I enjoy reading all kinds of stories. I really enjoyed your story and
Originality: 6.5/10
The story is a bit predictable, but with the different twists you had weren't so bad.
Style of Your Writing: 10/15
It was really well written and the paragraphs were spaced out fine. No faults.
Its good that you changed your writing style from script to dialoged-- Based on the previous reviewer's tips.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 14/15
I found very little mistakes in your writing.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 8/10
You had pretty good descriptions, especially during action and romance scenes.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 7/10
The background and poster were very nice, not boring at all, the text blended well with the background and was not difficult for me to read.
Creativity and Bonus: 2/5
I am REALLY sorry for handing this in late. T__T REALLY sorry.
Total: 76/100
Great job(: again, truly sorry for the very late entry.
Thursday, May 28, 2009
Friday, May 15, 2009
Review Number 9
Title: First Last Kiss
Author: yalunxgui
Reviewer: Luluangel
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/loveguilun/
Title: 4/5
The title fit the story fairly well.
Forewords: 7/10
The forewords for the most part didn't tell me much what would happen next in the story... other than the fact that Gui Gui was moving to Taiwan, and was scared of being around Boys because she had been going to a all girls school all her life. Mainly your forewords were the songs lyrics of the song that motivated you to write, and not alot for just the story... I think you could've made the forewords for the story a little longer, and a bit more descriptive.
Plot: 18/20
The story isn't completed yet.. So I can't really be accurate about the plot... but It sounds pretty good.
Originality: 9/10
The story of a girl just moving back to Taiwan from Korea is not commonly written, and I like how Gui Gui had thought Hebe was her friend, and how Hebe made Gui promise her that she wouldn't steal his heart. I think this was a really good idea, and how Gui Gui struggles to keep the promise she had made to Hebe.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Straight forward, and easy to understand. Well-typed.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 14/15
There was only a little amount of spelling mistakes, and grammar mistakes. But nothing too much to be worried about.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 9/10
Really descriptive. Words easy to understand.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 8/10
I really liked the poster, though the background sometimes blended in with the font color, therefore making it harder for the reader to read the words.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5
Overall Total: 88/100
I enjoyed reading your story! Thankyou for choosing Timeless-Memories. Hope to hear from you soon.
Author: yalunxgui
Reviewer: Luluangel
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/loveguilun/
Title: 4/5
The title fit the story fairly well.
Forewords: 7/10
The forewords for the most part didn't tell me much what would happen next in the story... other than the fact that Gui Gui was moving to Taiwan, and was scared of being around Boys because she had been going to a all girls school all her life. Mainly your forewords were the songs lyrics of the song that motivated you to write, and not alot for just the story... I think you could've made the forewords for the story a little longer, and a bit more descriptive.
Plot: 18/20
The story isn't completed yet.. So I can't really be accurate about the plot... but It sounds pretty good.
Originality: 9/10
The story of a girl just moving back to Taiwan from Korea is not commonly written, and I like how Gui Gui had thought Hebe was her friend, and how Hebe made Gui promise her that she wouldn't steal his heart. I think this was a really good idea, and how Gui Gui struggles to keep the promise she had made to Hebe.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Straight forward, and easy to understand. Well-typed.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 14/15
There was only a little amount of spelling mistakes, and grammar mistakes. But nothing too much to be worried about.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 9/10
Really descriptive. Words easy to understand.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 8/10
I really liked the poster, though the background sometimes blended in with the font color, therefore making it harder for the reader to read the words.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5
Overall Total: 88/100
I enjoyed reading your story! Thankyou for choosing Timeless-Memories. Hope to hear from you soon.
Sunday, May 3, 2009
Review Number 8
Author: Haine
Reviewer: GuiLun41
URL: winglin.net/fanfic/hainexazien
Title: 4/5
I thought the title matched the story fairly well.
Forewords: 10/10
Perfect! i thought the forewords were very well written and had enough description to keep readers guessing what going to happen.
Plot: 16/20
It seemed a little hard for me to imagine Li Xin deciding to just live with Le Cai.
Originality: 8/10
The storyline is one that is not commonly used among other fanfics i have read. Especially the characters. I wasn't used to reading different names of the characters. So it was a challenge for me to read it while mixing up the names. But eventually i got used to it.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Well typed, and not in script form.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 13/15
I saw a few grammar, spelling, and puncuation mistakes. but nothing too serious. But i did spot one mistake that bothered me a little.
Example: Chapter 8
"...I looked up at him. "You don't understand, my life, Wen Jun, you don't understand any of it!..."
In this you wrote 'Wen Jun' but i think you really meant to put Le Cai.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 7/10
There were minor charater that were explained alot more than they should. This makes the reader think that they will=2 0become important later on. Such as the maid in Wen Jun's house and the three boys in chapter one.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 10/10
The poster and background was able to help the mood of the story. The background and the text fit together perfectly, and gave no difficulties for me to read.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5
Overall total: 87/100
I had fun reading the story(: Thank you for choosing
timeless-memories!
Reviewer: GuiLun41
URL: winglin.net/fanfic/hainexazien
Title: 4/5
I thought the title matched the story fairly well.
Forewords: 10/10
Perfect! i thought the forewords were very well written and had enough description to keep readers guessing what going to happen.
Plot: 16/20
It seemed a little hard for me to imagine Li Xin deciding to just live with Le Cai.
Originality: 8/10
The storyline is one that is not commonly used among other fanfics i have read. Especially the characters. I wasn't used to reading different names of the characters. So it was a challenge for me to read it while mixing up the names. But eventually i got used to it.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Well typed, and not in script form.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 13/15
I saw a few grammar, spelling, and puncuation mistakes. but nothing too serious. But i did spot one mistake that bothered me a little.
Example: Chapter 8
"...I looked up at him. "You don't understand, my life, Wen Jun, you don't understand any of it!..."
In this you wrote 'Wen Jun' but i think you really meant to put Le Cai.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 7/10
There were minor charater that were explained alot more than they should. This makes the reader think that they will=2 0become important later on. Such as the maid in Wen Jun's house and the three boys in chapter one.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 10/10
The poster and background was able to help the mood of the story. The background and the text fit together perfectly, and gave no difficulties for me to read.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5
Overall total: 87/100
I had fun reading the story(: Thank you for choosing
timeless-memories!
Review Number 7
Title : The End
Author : UnknownViet
Reviewer : BoBoLi0us
Fanfic URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/end/
Title: 4/5
Even though the title is quite common to me, I think it fits the whole plot and story. A LOT .
Forewords: 8/10
I loved how you started. How usually people use the end to END a story, but instead you used it to start one. This counts in your originality.
Plot: 17/20
It is refreshing, as in you used uljjangs instead of the usual Kpop or Cpop pairings. However, this kind of storyline are seriously over used. But you made it unique when you wrote it in such a way.
Originality: 8/10
As I said, the plot is over used. But as you started the story with an END instead of a beginning, that was really what made me like the story so much.
‘The End marks the epilogue of the love I've shared for him, and the birth of the new ME.’ I loved this sentence. Enough said.
Style of Your Writing: 12/15
Your style of writing is good, but I tend to see few mistakes here and there. I take it as you have edited the story quite a number of times? Because the first time I read through the whole thing, I see weird errors. I love how contrasting the flashback and reality was too.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 12/15
Like what I said before, the first time I read this, I saw a lot of spelling errors. Not grammatical, but spelling errors. SO I was pleasantly surprised when I reread it and most of them were gone.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 8/10
There is, of course, room for improvement for everyone. You described the character and made me feel like I was watching a movie. And this is GOOD. You can use bigger words thought, especially ones that would make your readers check the dictionary,
Appearance: -/10
I will deduct this section from the evaluating system as you have no poster nor background. However, the color of the words was contrasting against the background, and thus it made the readers read easier.
Creativity and Bonus: 3/5
You have potential. As long as you work on the spelling errors, and space out the HUGE chunks of a paragraph you tend to use, it’ll be good.
Total : 82 /9o
Author : UnknownViet
Reviewer : BoBoLi0us
Fanfic URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/end/
Title: 4/5
Even though the title is quite common to me, I think it fits the whole plot and story. A LOT .
Forewords: 8/10
I loved how you started. How usually people use the end to END a story, but instead you used it to start one. This counts in your originality.
Plot: 17/20
It is refreshing, as in you used uljjangs instead of the usual Kpop or Cpop pairings. However, this kind of storyline are seriously over used. But you made it unique when you wrote it in such a way.
Originality: 8/10
As I said, the plot is over used. But as you started the story with an END instead of a beginning, that was really what made me like the story so much.
‘The End marks the epilogue of the love I've shared for him, and the birth of the new ME.’ I loved this sentence. Enough said.
Style of Your Writing: 12/15
Your style of writing is good, but I tend to see few mistakes here and there. I take it as you have edited the story quite a number of times? Because the first time I read through the whole thing, I see weird errors. I love how contrasting the flashback and reality was too.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 12/15
Like what I said before, the first time I read this, I saw a lot of spelling errors. Not grammatical, but spelling errors. SO I was pleasantly surprised when I reread it and most of them were gone.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 8/10
There is, of course, room for improvement for everyone. You described the character and made me feel like I was watching a movie. And this is GOOD. You can use bigger words thought, especially ones that would make your readers check the dictionary,
Appearance: -/10
I will deduct this section from the evaluating system as you have no poster nor background. However, the color of the words was contrasting against the background, and thus it made the readers read easier.
Creativity and Bonus: 3/5
You have potential. As long as you work on the spelling errors, and space out the HUGE chunks of a paragraph you tend to use, it’ll be good.
Total : 82 /9o
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