Review Number 7

Title : The End

Author : UnknownViet

Reviewer : BoBoLi0us

Fanfic URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/end/


Title: 4/5

Even though the title is quite common to me, I think it fits the whole plot and story. A LOT .


Forewords: 8/10

I loved how you started. How usually people use the end to END a story, but instead you used it to start one. This counts in your originality.


Plot: 17/20

It is refreshing, as in you used uljjangs instead of the usual Kpop or Cpop pairings. However, this kind of storyline are seriously over used. But you made it unique when you wrote it in such a way.


Originality: 8/10

As I said, the plot is over used. But as you started the story with an END instead of a beginning, that was really what made me like the story so much.

‘The End marks the epilogue of the love I've shared for him, and the birth of the new ME.’ I loved this sentence. Enough said.


Style of Your Writing: 12/15

Your style of writing is good, but I tend to see few mistakes here and there. I take it as you have edited the story quite a number of times? Because the first time I read through the whole thing, I see weird errors. I love how contrasting the flashback and reality was too.


Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 12/15

Like what I said before, the first time I read this, I saw a lot of spelling errors. Not grammatical, but spelling errors. SO I was pleasantly surprised when I reread it and most of them were gone.


Descriptions and Word Choice: 8/10

There is, of course, room for improvement for everyone. You described the character and made me feel like I was watching a movie. And this is GOOD. You can use bigger words thought, especially ones that would make your readers check the dictionary,


Appearance: -/10

I will deduct this section from the evaluating system as you have no poster nor background. However, the color of the words was contrasting against the background, and thus it made the readers read easier.


Creativity and Bonus: 3/5

You have potential. As long as you work on the spelling errors, and space out the HUGE chunks of a paragraph you tend to use, it’ll be good.



Total : 82 /9o