Review Number 9

Title: First Last Kiss
Author: yalunxgui
Reviewer: Luluangel
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/loveguilun/

Title: 4/5
The title fit the story fairly well.
Forewords: 7/10
The forewords for the most part didn't tell me much what would happen next in the story... other than the fact that Gui Gui was moving to Taiwan, and was scared of being around Boys because she had been going to a all girls school all her life. Mainly your forewords were the songs lyrics of the song that motivated you to write, and not alot for just the story... I think you could've made the forewords for the story a little longer, and a bit more descriptive.
Plot: 18/20
The story isn't completed yet.. So I can't really be accurate about the plot... but It sounds pretty good.
Originality: 9/10
The story of a girl just moving back to Taiwan from Korea is not commonly written, and I like how Gui Gui had thought Hebe was her friend, and how Hebe made Gui promise her that she wouldn't steal his heart. I think this was a really good idea, and how Gui Gui struggles to keep the promise she had made to Hebe.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Straight forward, and easy to understand. Well-typed.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 14/15
There was only a little amount of spelling mistakes, and grammar mistakes. But nothing too much to be worried about.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 9/10
Really descriptive. Words easy to understand.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 8/10
I really liked the poster, though the background sometimes blended in with the font color, therefore making it harder for the reader to read the words.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5

Overall Total: 88/100

I enjoyed reading your story! Thankyou for choosing Timeless-Memories. Hope to hear from you soon.